"I wear the two, the mobile and the landline phones,
like guns, slung from the pockets on my hips. I'm all
alone. You ring, quickdraw, your voice a pellet
in my ear, and hear me groan."
Metaphor for guns. Viscious slanging match. Enjambement-line runs to next without punctuation. Loneliness. Effective because allows fluidity, iscolates word alone. Shows how quickly she answers.Onomatopoeic, plosive, hurt. Abrupt, unexpected pause, jerky, disjointed, reflects theme.
"You've wounded me.
Next time, you speak after the tone. I twirl the phone,
then squeeze the trigger of my tongue, wide of the mark.
You choose your spot, then blast me"
Split line/ emphasises her hurt. Internal rhyme adds up to the fractured rhythm, effective because it emphasises fractured rhythm just like fractured relationship. Western action, getting ready for battle. Alliterative t's make it very powerful, firing insults. Wait till it's your turn to speak. Plosive, powerful verb.
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