Slides in this set
Language: Mostly metaphors
· "Only then would he let me trace
the frozen river which ran through his Structure
· Rhyme = Mostly half rhyming couplets
· Different injuries introduced in
Takes time to freeze, old wounds. different couplets
He let me= under His control. Need · Unrhymed = sense of
permission fragmentation, broken man
`only then' repetition = slow · st
1 person narrative,
· Regular rhythm and length
· "the foetus of metal beneath his chest"
· Wife's methodical patient
Metal=cold and unfeeling treatment of caring for husband
Foetus metaphor symbolism:
· Growing pain
· Heart. Not fully developed. Still
· Not connected to him. Like a
baby only living in him. · Trust
· "a sweating unexploded mine" · Communication
Transferred epithet · Rebuilding broken relationship
· Hot/easily angered. Bothered. · PTSD post traumatic stress disorder.
Quick to explode Wife is trying to mend mental wounds
· Nervous/scared/tense of husband, sustained whilst at war.
Mine=explosion of emotions. · "Manhunt" -> Searching for the man she
once knew but now has lost
· "parachute silk", "porcelain", "foetus",
"finger and thumb", "handle and hold"
Indicates he is fragile and damaged.
· Standard formal English
· "Then, then and only then, did I come close
Repetition = emphasis on effort
· Close to him-love?
· Close to finding real man
hidden inside damage which
has been left?
Only half rhyme with last line makes it
a muted ending = he is not completely
better yet…read more
· "For thousands of seconds we kiss" · Shakespearean sonnet
Juxtaposition. Counting seconds rather 14 lines
than minutes. Emphasises how valuable
Predictable rhyme scheme
each second is.
Assonance of `n' and `d' sounds which
slow the pace of the reader and Last rhyming couplet concluding
symbolise how she is trying to prolong poem does not offer huge `turn'
time. in meaning, like usual sonnets,
· "than here. Now. Time hates love, confirming idea that love will
wants love poor, but love spins gold,
gold, gold from straw."
Caesuras - > break up line so takes · Stanzas same length due to
longer to read. Time is slowing for love. enjambment
Love turns something small to Enjambment breaks ups lines but
something precious (straw->gold) Can also give sense of stopping and
find riches in anything. starting. Time seems to stop, but
1 word sentence `Now'. Emphasises inevitably keeps flowing onwards
simplicity of situation and their feeling · Irregular rhythm
of completeness and satisfaction. Don't time is not fixed when with love.
care about future or past.
Reference to fairytale character
Rumplestiltskin adds a magical feel to
Repetition of `gold' shows it is ongoing
· CARPE DIEM: live in moment
Time is obstacle for love
· "We find an hour together, spend it not
on flowers or wine, but the whole of Few moments together are
invaluable and precious
the summer sky and a grass ditch".
Happiest moments when lose
Pun on `spend' with time and wealth.
sense of time
Unconventional romantic ideas such as
`grass ditch' and later `cuckoo spit' show
· True love
how the strength of their romance Joy of being together
makes other traditional ideas seem Romantic fantasy
unimportant. Love finds riches in Love is precious
· Traditional battle of love and time
· "Bright", "summer sky", "Midas light", · Love finds riches in anything
"shining hour", "candle", "chandelier
Everything is warm and bright when
they are together in love.
Don't dwell on darkness or separation.
· "Your hair like treasure on the ground"
In Paris with You
· "I'm one of your talking wounded. I' · Stanzas (excluding middle one) are
m a hostage. I'm maroonded." similar in line length and rhythm.
"your" =belongs to him. Not under · Regular rhyme: ABCCB
her control or her choice.
· Refrain- "I'm in Paris with you."
End stopped lines and full stops
emphasise statements. · Middle stanza indented with shorter
Informal/colloquial language lines:
"maroonded" and later Different mood
"bamboozled" to maintain rhyme = Ideas speeding up.
fun and inventive. Getting more excited. Not
Direct address to reader. Feel more wasting time. One night stand.
involved. Poem is very intimate and
we are made to feel as though we
are eavesdropping. Tone:
"talking wounded"-> Metaphor. · Colloquial and very informal = seems
Showing her hurt. Pun on phrase honest
"walking wounded" (used in context
of war). · Down to earth
· "And I don't care where are we · Light tone hiding her pain.
"we" emphasises they are together. Themes
Wants to flaunt it. · Lust/passion
"Are we". Switched noun and verb = · Not true love = cheap/fake
question structure · Carpe Diem
· Little knowledge about
future/ or her uncertainty if Live in the moment. No romance
· grammar sacrificed for rhyme. Language
· "Learning who you are, Learning · "We say sod off to sodding Notre Dame"
what I am." Rejecting Paris (the city of lovers)
"What I am". Not human. Detaching iconic landmarks suggests this is not
from situation. a traditional love poem.
Experimental physical activities. She's had enough of romance and
"Cheaper" attitude to love than rest wants it to go away.
of poem. Skipping romance and just Repetition of `sod' shows her
· "I'm in Paris with you." Very down to earth
Symbolic. Paris = a cheaper fake love.
Living and loving in the moment. Not
the real love. Skipping romance.
Repeated constantly, showing how
important this is to her. Insistent
concentration on the present.…read more
· "You choose your spot, then blast me....
through the heart"
"You choose". Direct address. Under lovers
"Blast" indicates it is painful. Blasting of
love or bullets. · Irregular pauses with caesuras and
"through the heart" = new line enjambment. = breaking up text
enjambment for emphasis. Pause between randomly, reflecting unpredictable
lines =delayed reaction. Time slows down.
relationship and tension of battle.
· "And this is love, high noon, calamity,
hard liquor" Erratic pace like a gun-fight or heated
Not "my love". Detaching herself from argument.
situation. Not admitting. · Shape of stanzas are irregular. Emotions
Based on westerns. "high noon" film when are all over the place.
a Sheriff goes into battle. She feels like in a
fierce gunfight with lover. · No rhyme scheme or regular rhythm.
Comparison to "hard liquor". Random internal rhyme.
· Makes you high · 16 lines of free verse in 4 stanzas.
· Bad consequences as it doesn't last
forever. A hit. A shock. Then lets you
down. Can't always live drinking
· "You ring, quickdraw, your voice a pellet"
Caesuras breaking up line showing
unpredictable sudden pain.
Extended metaphor between
contemporary phones and guns, fitting with
historic western theme. Shows how Tone
relationships have long been this way.
Juxtaposition of archaic and new is
awkward and reflects awkward relationship · Contemporary/modern language
"pellet" = sharp onomatopoeic. Bullet. context.
"quickdraw" fast reactions. Been waiting
· Light-hearted and humorous due to
for this call. some of the images typical of slapstick.
· "I twirl the phone, then squeeze the · Serious emotional struggle.
trigger of my tongue, wide of the mark."
Tongue metaphor as weapon = argument.
Comic as combined with `t' alliteration.
Doesn't want to hurt him. Purposefully · Relationships can become a struggle for
misses. power, leading to shootouts/arguments.
· "Take this... and this... and this..." · Love
Shots of guns/kisses. Ambiguous.
Ellipsis shows argument is not over.
· Similarities between love of history and
Monosyllabic expression "take this" implies now.
she is still angry.
Or she is confused about her emotions. Can'
t think, can only give repetitive cry.
· "silver bullets of your kiss"
Precious and harmful juxtaposition. Kisses
are painful but she treasures them.
Or just painful metal bullets.…read more
· "If I am the grass and you the breeze, · Ancient Persian form of poetry (ghazal)
blow through me." similar to sonnet:
Spiritual references to nature = timeless
and permanent love. Their love is a 5 or more couplets/stanzas
natural thing About forbidden love. Often spiritual
Direct address giving insight into about God.
narrators thoughts and feelings. Feel
involved. Stanzas are called `shers'.
Physical love. Breeze and grass touch Last stanza tie in with authors name.
and move together. Regular rhythm
First comma caesura separates `If' clause
of stanza with the `then' clause. · Couplets all end in `me'. She is very involved
· "charmer, use your charm, weave a and personal. This is typical of ghazal, called
spell and subdue me." a `radif'
"spell" = powerful magic of love. Can · Most stanzas start with `if' = conditional,
transform/change and subdue uncertain. Consequences of narrator's
venomous snake. wishes depend on response. Trying lots of
"subdue me" = they are a higher power.
She wants them to control her and keep different roles to get the love she desires
her in line. from man. Shows her desperation for this
Metaphor of love/personification of her love.
role continues from first line of stanza. · Enjambment within stanza = continuation
Emphasises what he is, what she is, and
what they are together. of their love and connection between them.
Low self-esteem. Charmer more But also separating his actions and her
talented and important than snake, actions.
· "Shamsuddin to my Rumi" · Each stanza = new theme/idea in quick
Shamsuddin= a dirvish (dances in succession. Makes poem seem playful but
circular motions to communicate with quite intense.
Rumi wrote ghazals to Shamsuddin.
Bringing in religious and spiritual aspects Tone
· Playful but with standard, formal English
· "Be heaven and earth to me and I'll be
twice the me I am, if only half the Themes
world you are to me." · Unattainable love
No `if' showing her certainty. Conclusion
reached that they need each other to be · Positive and negative love.
greater and whole. · Longing to be an object to man's love.
"twice the me" linking in to authors
name, typical of poems structure. · The lover completing a person.
Love will complete her.
· "What shape should I take to marry Language
your own....moth to my flame" · "When the arrow flies, the heart is
"Marry" is a pun meaning to match up,
but also hinting hopes for relationship. pierced, tattoo me."
"Moth/Flame" contains idea of Wants it to be permanent like
destruction and irresistible attraction. tattoo. Heart + arrow is traditional
The speaker is well aware of the
dangerous feelings they have. tattoo of love.
Carries hints of conflict/aggression.
Not all love is sweet.…read more