Passage 1 - Touching the void
- Created by: Smartieee
- Created on: 17-12-12 12:17
Joe’s account - The paragraphing marks the development of his situation and thoughts, the first paragraph, for example explains his external pain, and the second, his internal pain.
Paragraph 1:
The first few sentences all begin with ‘I’. This use of first person creates a more vivid and direct account of what happened. There is a lot of alliteration in the first paragraph, ‘slope, struck, shattering, splitting, screamed, sudden, speed, stop’ = sibilance. Very graphic, creates a real atmosphere, and the reader can really imagine the pain he is going through (emphasised by the repetition of ‘Screamed’.) There is a succession of clauses, commas and details which shows the speed of what is happening.
The 2nd paragraph
The metaphors contradict each other, first is a ‘flooding’ then a ‘burning fire’. It is also the past tense being recalled, the passage is being motivated by his awareness of his reader – need to create an enthralling piece.
Words can’t do justice to the amount of pain he is in
3rd paragraph
Returns back to first person and refers to a previous metaphor of ‘burning’. The language becomes more abstract, suggests trauma. Builds up through repetitions + alliterations from “something” to “panic” the direct speech (showing his thoughts) and his recollection of what other…
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