Joe’s account - The paragraphing marks the development of his situation and thoughts, the first paragraph, for example explains his external pain, and the second, his internal pain.
The first few sentences all begin with ‘I’. This use of first person creates a more vivid and direct account of what happened. There is a lot of alliteration in the first paragraph, ‘slope, struck, shattering, splitting, screamed, sudden, speed, stop’ = sibilance. Very graphic, creates a real atmosphere, and the reader can really imagine the pain he is going through (emphasised by the repetition of ‘Screamed’.) There is a succession of clauses, commas and details which shows the speed of what is happening.
The 2nd paragraph
The metaphors contradict each other, first is a ‘flooding’ then a ‘burning fire’. It is also the past tense being recalled, the passage is being motivated by his awareness of his reader – need to create an enthralling piece.
Words can’t do justice to the amount of pain he is in
Returns back to first person and refers to a previous metaphor of ‘burning’. The language becomes more abstract, suggests trauma. Builds up through repetitions + alliterations from “something” to “panic” the direct speech (showing his thoughts) and his recollection of what other…