Taking on the world, how does she create a vivid picture

Chronological, therefore making it easier to follow the scene as it unfolds. The passage explains Ellen MacArthur's problem at the start and then follows her attempt to complete the task

At start, "hardest climb to date" but by the end, "we had the best present ever". This shows the struggle and the sense of elation and accomplishment that Ellen felt

Conversational.

This may be taken as underdeveloped writing.

This also makes us relate to the struggles more than if it were overly descriptive.

Alot of imagery created

"laying out the halyard on the deck"

not very complex which is makes it easy to create a mental picture of what is occuring.

More at the climax.

This echoes what is happening to Ellen MacArthur as she is more likely to be injured the further up the mast that she goes.

Reflects her determination and perserverance.

"eyes closed and teeth gritted"

This helpes you empathise with her as it is showing a hardship but also her determination not to fail however hard it gets.

Vivid picture of her fear in penultimate paragraph.

Syntax breaks down as she faces the final danger of the escapade.