- Created by: RandomEpicness
- Created on: 28-06-20 11:51
'sudden thump' - onomatopoeic word suggests something powerful.
'Like us,'- minor sentence suggests irony, such a powerful bird should feel afraid of the writer, who shows signs of nervousness herself.
'And another. Thump' - Series of short, minor sentences indicate tension and anticipation. Macdonald hears the bird before seeing it.
'barred and beating'- alliteration of the 'b' increases drama
'Two enormous eyes'- repetition of enormous again and short sentences emphasise the bird's appearance. Emphasise Macdonald's shock and amazement.
'She is a conjuring trick'- metaphor suggesting bird is too wonderful to be real- illusion.
'like gold falling through water' - this simile evokes a beautiful image.
'it was born of care' - short sentencing indicates Macdonald's careful observation of man's attitude.
'and much, much bigger, and...'- repetition of 'and' reflects growing realisation of the difference in the 2 birds
'Do you think there's any chance...'- Direct speech comes out as blurted and nervous.
'against the article 10s' - This legal language contrasts with nature
'Don't want you going home with the wrong bird'- statement turns out ironic.
'flecked with dust'- provides a visual image to slow motion. Builds anticipation.
'all happening at once'- The struggling bird makes it hard to see what is happening. Present tense is used here for immediacy.
'enormous, enormous'- shows surprise and indicates that she is speechless.
'she can see everything'- italics followed by list of details of what hawk can see suggests the sensory overload the hawk is experiencing. Illustrate the hawk's amazing eyesight.
'in one hand'- the man keeping the bird is skilled and competent with it.
'keeping her head in the air'- long complex sentences reflect complex care of hawk.
'hackles raised...'- these are all giving a very vivid, visual description.
'madwoman in the attack'- play on words, 'madwoman in the attic' is a character in the novel Jane Eyre- this quote connects to the Victorian melodrama reference.
'This is my hawk'- italics here are used to represent Macdonald's inner voice
'but this isn't my hawk' - Macdonald's inner voice is changing view.
'yellow form folded, the money exchanged'- list shows how long Macdonald holds back from expressing her feelings.
'incoherent appeals' - Confused and disordered. Connects her to first bird- confused.
'total silence' - We are left in suspense at the end of the text.
- Extract begins with careful checking of detailed doccuments, turns out ironic as Macdonald feels she is buying the wrong bird.
- Writer uses 2 short paragraphs, including a one word paragraph to create a turning point in the text. 'Oh'
- Inner thoughts expressed through italics.
IDEAS AND PERSPECTIVES
- Personal account
- Amazed with first hawk, connection
- Tries to imagine hawk's perspective
- Macdonald sees hawks as individual personalities.
- Descriptive language
- Tension and confusion by short sentences and single word paragraph.
- Change of tense. Present tense = immediacy
- Writer's inner voice
- Minor, short sentences
- Long complex sentences
- Semantic field of instability